My Wish for You

This is a draft of a poem I’m writing for my 5th grade students as we begin a new school year in a couple of weeks. Would love feedback!

My Wish for You

The Sound of a Wish by ilmungo on Flickr

I wish…

That you wake up and feel okay about school,
          that some days you LOVE going to school,
                         that you never dread going to school.
          That every day we LAUGH out loud together.
          That every day we enjoy music and DANCE.
          That you feel safe.
          That every day you have something GOOD to say
               when your parent asks, “How was school today?”

That you can tell I care about you
       You might FEEL angry at me sometimes,
            like you feel angry with your parents sometimes,
              but I want you to KNOW that I sincerely care,
     all the time,
      no matter what.

That you set an example of kindness for those older and younger than you.
      That you are kinder than necessary because you understand
             that you can’t possibly know everything each person is going through.

That you enjoy learning.
           That you think of things in ways you never have before,
              That you realize you are part of  GLOBAL community,
                That you responsibly contribute.

That you see how your writing can make a difference.
        That you understand the practice we do,
        That you receive real responses.
        That you write something of which you can feel proud.

That you absolutely fall in love with reading
            that you continue to love it if you already do,
            that together we find “The Book” that gets you hooked this year if you don’t.
I can’t say this enough,
I wish for you all to discover the POWER of reading.

My wish for you this year is that you contribute to making this world a better place for everyone.

My wish for myself is I make all of this possible for you.

-Mrs. T.G. 🙂

 

 

 

5 thoughts on “My Wish for You

  1. Michelle,

    I love the concept and the emotions shared in this poem. What an awesome gift to your students for the beginning of their journey with you. You inspire with your passion and compassion. Your students are truly lucky. I would love to have my 5th grade son in your class.

    Have a great start to your year!

    Scott Boylen

  2. Hi Michelle,
    This week in Children’s Literature class we are studying, reading, & writing poetry. I was telling and showing them about list poems, and I said I read a beautiful sort of “list poem” just today. I opened your blog and read the poem to them. They just loved it and oohed and awwwed. Anyway, it was funny, one of the things I found myself doing as I read was repeating the “I wish” at the beginning of each set/stanza. I’m not sure you like that suggestion, but in my opinion, it made it even better because it kept reminding us that these were your wishes for your kids.

    I’ll be excited to see the end result. Thanks for sharing your draft with us.

    Denise

  3. Thanks Denise!
    I’m going to revisit in a week when I have “fresh eyes” and can find more improvements. Definitely want to play with line breaks and punctuation. Also, probably too many words. Will try to thin it down a bit.

    Appreciate your feedback and encouragement!
    -Michelle

  4. Michelle, I can give feedback! It is beautiful and gives me warm feelings. Makes me want to be a student in your room. Great job. I have no constructive criticism. I just wanted to say you have a great gift going here for your new students.

    Denise

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